Artemis Show

[parasitegirl]

My feelings about this here clip were noted a few days ago.

That being said, I've lightened up a bit since then. The zills are clunky, sparse, and predictable... but it was my first time on a large (for Tokyo) stage with a sold-out crowd playing zills. Two months before, before the restaurant because a regular thing,  I'd only played zills in public three times, I think I have gotten better. I'm still hating on a few things...and odd lurch here, an anticipated moment there, my right angle arms at moments and spins, unfinished moved I should have slowed down and followed through...but there are small moments where I see the dancer that I think I am...

Constructive comments are welcome, just be gentle. Realize that this is about 8 months ago and that I've had some influencial workshops and breakthrough moments since then...God, I hope I have. This will remained unfiltered for a bit.

Comments

[eshenavah.livejournal.com]

It was fun and passionate and lovely! I love your turns.

[nightingayle.livejournal.com]

Us lower beings think you were fabulous.

[doronjosama.livejournal.com]

To my untrained eye, you looked fantastic! But I've always liked how you moved. (Remembers dancing with you to the Evangelion themesong at a Nekocon a million years and two lifetimes ago... XD )

Honestly, the weirdest part for me is seeing you with such long hair. I mean, I've seen it in the still shots and it looks amazingly good, but seeing it moving just was... strange to me. XD So weird!

[kimuchi.livejournal.com]

This is by no means meant as a criticism, but once or twice I got just a glimpse of...dmf. :D

[arovd.livejournal.com]

my only comment would be to try and keep your shoulders away from your ears. you have this thing that you do, where you kind of hunch your shoulders up - it's like a signature expressive move, and it's fantastic... I would just be aware of when you're doing it, and make sure it's intentional and punctuating, and be aware of not letting your shoulders creep up at other times when it's unintentional. :) if that makes sense?

you have a lovely vivacious style, this is the first time i've seen a full on performance and please don't take the comment as more than it is - i was looking for issues, because you asked for constructive criticism. I also saw excellent musicality, a very genuine and open facial expression, and joy joy joy joy joy!

I would love to see more video, and seriously i've seen enough belly dancing that i wouldn't ask to see more if i didn't actually want to see it. :)

that music kicks ass

[superdaintykate.livejournal.com]

I think you are being much too hard on yourself.

That said -- and take this with a grain, since my dance style is so different from yours, and I don't know the expectations from Turkish -- but I would like to see more level changes. I see a lot of face-to-the-audience, with arms in mid-to-high position...would it be possible to go into a crouch, or down into the knees, or face away and work facing upstage, or travel around the dance space? It would make things like that lovely stretch up at the dramatic pause even more effective.

And -- this is entirely my own predjudice -- but I'd like to see you do less, and then build into more movement. Holding pauses longer, epsecially at the dramatic moments in the music or after those awesome breaks, and then relenting to get pulled back in, that sort of thing.

Last thing -- how are you handling getting your hair out of your face, now? I gather the length is new to you and it can get distracting to push it away.

The accents are spot on and killer, you have some really gorgeous internal hip- and body-work, and you have the perfect amount of joy in your dance :)

[sakkaranoush.livejournal.com]

Hey, you're getting there! Your fluidity (as many people mentioned) and grace will be one of your lasting trademarks. I admire you for dancing to some challenging (to me) music. Good arms too! I've seen too many dances ruined by bad arms.

The only thing I wanted to see more of was more pretty face--maybe your hair held back over one ear by an ornament or flower? Or maybe some bodacious glittery hoop earrings?

Keep on, keep on- and thanks for posting your video. I enjoyed it.