Artemis Show

[parasitegirl]

My feelings about this here clip were noted a few days ago.

That being said, I've lightened up a bit since then. The zills are clunky, sparse, and predictable... but it was my first time on a large (for Tokyo) stage with a sold-out crowd playing zills. Two months before, before the restaurant because a regular thing,  I'd only played zills in public three times, I think I have gotten better. I'm still hating on a few things...and odd lurch here, an anticipated moment there, my right angle arms at moments and spins, unfinished moved I should have slowed down and followed through...but there are small moments where I see the dancer that I think I am...

Constructive comments are welcome, just be gentle. Realize that this is about 8 months ago and that I've had some influencial workshops and breakthrough moments since then...God, I hope I have. This will remained unfiltered for a bit.

Comments

[eshenavah.livejournal.com]

It was fun and passionate and lovely! I love your turns.

[parasitegirl.livejournal.com]

When given space to do so I dooooooo so love to turn.

[nightingayle.livejournal.com]

Us lower beings think you were fabulous.

[parasitegirl.livejournal.com]

Thank you.

A hard thing to do...to find that balance between being critical enough that you can define areas to work on and grow...and to still be able to see the good things and not let the voice of doubt shut you down.

[lauralita44.livejournal.com]

seconded! :)

[parasitegirl.livejournal.com]

And a second thanks!

[parasitegirl.livejournal.com]

THank you much!

[doronjosama.livejournal.com]

To my untrained eye, you looked fantastic! But I've always liked how you moved. (Remembers dancing with you to the Evangelion themesong at a Nekocon a million years and two lifetimes ago... XD )

Honestly, the weirdest part for me is seeing you with such long hair. I mean, I've seen it in the still shots and it looks amazingly good, but seeing it moving just was... strange to me. XD So weird!

[parasitegirl.livejournal.com]

People who lost contact with me around high school and found me in the short hair phases were similarly shocked!

[kimuchi.livejournal.com]

This is by no means meant as a criticism, but once or twice I got just a glimpse of...dmf. :D

[parasitegirl.livejournal.com]

Yup!

When I was in art school one thing the drawing majors had to do in our last year was a "retrospective crit" where we eached filled a room full of as much artwork over the years as we could...age one-now...and we had to sit in that room for about 30 minutes before we let the others in and all talked about the art and what seemed to be threads/naratives....like the fact I have never drawn backgrounds. I like figures on an isolated plane...even in elementary school.

I'm sure if the same was done for my dancelife you'd find some core part of my dancing is essentially unchanged since DMF.

[arovd.livejournal.com]

my only comment would be to try and keep your shoulders away from your ears. you have this thing that you do, where you kind of hunch your shoulders up - it's like a signature expressive move, and it's fantastic... I would just be aware of when you're doing it, and make sure it's intentional and punctuating, and be aware of not letting your shoulders creep up at other times when it's unintentional. :) if that makes sense?

you have a lovely vivacious style, this is the first time i've seen a full on performance and please don't take the comment as more than it is - i was looking for issues, because you asked for constructive criticism. I also saw excellent musicality, a very genuine and open facial expression, and joy joy joy joy joy!

I would love to see more video, and seriously i've seen enough belly dancing that i wouldn't ask to see more if i didn't actually want to see it. :)

[parasitegirl.livejournal.com]

It does make sense. I think my shoulders creeping up and forward may be part of whatis putting my elbows where I don't like them. Rolling my shoudlers slightly forward and having my neck also slightly forward is a problem that I've seen on many occasions.

Don't worry, I was looking for small things to work on, it's what I need to do at this stage. I heard the good things too and I in no way think "Aravd thinks I'm a goddamned hunchback I'm gonna go drink a bottle of wine."

I simply don't have much video of myself, but we'll film the next Afet Show

that music kicks ass

[superdaintykate.livejournal.com]

I think you are being much too hard on yourself.

That said -- and take this with a grain, since my dance style is so different from yours, and I don't know the expectations from Turkish -- but I would like to see more level changes. I see a lot of face-to-the-audience, with arms in mid-to-high position...would it be possible to go into a crouch, or down into the knees, or face away and work facing upstage, or travel around the dance space? It would make things like that lovely stretch up at the dramatic pause even more effective.

And -- this is entirely my own predjudice -- but I'd like to see you do less, and then build into more movement. Holding pauses longer, epsecially at the dramatic moments in the music or after those awesome breaks, and then relenting to get pulled back in, that sort of thing.

Last thing -- how are you handling getting your hair out of your face, now? I gather the length is new to you and it can get distracting to push it away.

The accents are spot on and killer, you have some really gorgeous internal hip- and body-work, and you have the perfect amount of joy in your dance :)

Re: that music kicks ass

[parasitegirl.livejournal.com]

I am being to hard on myself. I watched it when I was super frazzles from a day of bad on-the-go eating and such and when I veiwed it I was litterally shaking from lack of good food but too absent minded to remember to go in the kitchen and fix myself something.

I agree with your on level changes and positions, it's something I'm working on, and I was struck how effective turning away from the audience is when I did it and how I should have done more. It's something I work on, forget, remember, work on...but for the record, that's a shallow stage and I don't usually get to move even that much.

Doing less is also an annual problem and when watching the video some of what I would wince at was a gooey moved started...but quickly left...I wanted to tell myself STAY THERE! WOOOOOORK IT!

My hair spits out anything I put in it. I do more hair tosses now.

Thank you, to dance is fun for me.

Re: that music kicks ass

[dozen-son.livejournal.com]

I think superdaintykate summed it up quite well: holding pauses and getting hair out of the way, which I believe are somewhat related issues :) There were a couple of ooey-gooey sections in music where you started those slow movements going and in the middle had to get your hair out of the way and it was distracting from your hip work. I'm trying to figure out what to do with my hair as well, it's a tough one.

You've already mentioned right angles in arms (I have a feeling it's a habit you acquired dancing in very small spaces), and I would take it further and add more arm variations, especially during your spins. You've done this around 1:44, it was a great moment where you've built drama with the music, loved it!

Other than that, it was wonderful! I really enjoyed it and watched it till the end (doesn't happen too often these days so it's a huge compliment :) ) You are so lively and with the music, it's a treat to watch you. And did I mention already that I love the poppies costume? :) And I like it even more with the red full skirt, the contrast brings out the poppies.

I subscribed to your channel, hope to see more videos in the future!

[parasitegirl.livejournal.com]

I hear you on that...my head sneaks forward, and sometimes it takes my shoulders with it. It's something I've worked on in the past btu need to revisit.

Thank you!

[sakkaranoush.livejournal.com]

Hey, you're getting there! Your fluidity (as many people mentioned) and grace will be one of your lasting trademarks. I admire you for dancing to some challenging (to me) music. Good arms too! I've seen too many dances ruined by bad arms.

The only thing I wanted to see more of was more pretty face--maybe your hair held back over one ear by an ornament or flower? Or maybe some bodacious glittery hoop earrings?

Keep on, keep on- and thanks for posting your video. I enjoyed it.

[parasitegirl.livejournal.com]

I really need to do some serious investment into figuring out a hairclip system that stays. I should probably hit the craft store and make some costume-matching hairclips and figure out the best hairclip and bobby pin security system.

An thank you for the fluidity/grace comment. It takes a while to really hear and absorb what people say....because while I have been saying "thank you" I also have been blanking on that particular comment because grace and fluidity are just two things I never think of myself as having.